The Chapter Four Revisions

I have received another email from the subscriber that suggested the Chapter Four revisions.  He states that he has since reread the chapter, and now disagrees with his revision suggestions.  At his request, I have decided to offer these revisions up to the group to see how you feel about them.  They are minor, and after rereading the chapter as well, I am of a mind that the subscriber is right, that the revisions no longer need to be made.

Because of the confusion, I have spoken with Dobby (my husband) and we have carved out a few hours this morning from our farmwork for me to post the information to you.

I will also be posting the Chapter Five draft, as I believe that you will agree with the subscriber and myself, who both feel that these edits are unnecessary.  Please feel free to contact me if you see anything else that you feel needs changing.

The original revision recommendations were that where I used italics to denote Katy's thoughts, I should have left out the italics, and put them in quotes.  I prefer the italics, but was going to try reworking the paragraph to match the recommendation.  However, the subscriber shot me another email saying that he now prefers the italics.

My question to you:  Are the italics appropriate in this situation?

Second revision recommendation:  The use of the phrase "exponentially more huge lollipop".  It was recommended that I change this to "exponentially huger lollipop".  I am not a fan of the word "huger".

What do you all think?

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Christy Parker is the author of three blogs:  Ruminations from and Unkempt Mind, Learn to Crochet - In Minutes a Day, and You Be the Editor.

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